Skin Poem [Original Works]

[Fishs]

 

Found My Book .. . Now I can't read my scribble ..

Ok here is one from a few months ago

Changing Scenes ....

The end of autumn
Is a sadder sight
Than the dead of winter
On a cold, bleak night

The trees stand half naked
Up on the hill
Between and betwix
As if they were ill

All the golden colours
Have turned to brown
And the red and orange leaves
Cover the ground

The end of autumn
Is not a season
It's a time for waiting
Without a reason..

Fish ..

Will put some more up if folk think they are good enough and like them .. I just dribble what ever I think of at the time  so most may not make much sense

Fish

[Gobe]

Melancholic thoughtful imagery there fishs - I really love the idea of the trees being ill.  I like these two lines:

The mind is filled with these images
That inspire  and make us write

 

I always think writing poetry is like taking snapshots of emotions ...right after I have had my breakfast I will choose another poem to put up.  

Maybe we should move this thread and create out own poets corner?

Thanks for sharing fishs - your work conveys a pensive quality and I like that.

[Andy50]

just want to jump in and say it`s a pleasure to read your poetry gobe and fish.

[Gobe]

The more the merrier Andy!  Looking forward to some of your some time!

[Fishs]

 

Gobe ..  

Brilliant .. Just brilliant ..

Take it from me Gobe .. You are very very good ..

I wrtie for a living  .. but you leave me for dead ..

You have  a nack of capturing the moment  and portraying it so well ..

inviting the reader to almost be part of the emotion is very hard to do ..

You have done that  perfectly ..

brilliant.  I do hope you will think of publishing your poems ..

yes you have me pegged .. Everyone tells me that comes through in whatever I write ..
pensive , thoughtful,, melancolic .. all that .. thats me

Poets corner .. Ummmm not a bad idea ..  I like it .

I will put a couple more up a little later ..

Gobe .. Please do not stop writing .. You are good .. and I am not just saying that ..

Fish

[Gobe]

Thank you Fish.

I've been writing since I was a child - but every so often I have great clear outs and throw things away.  I do have one small box left with lots of written on bits of paper.  I just like writing to please myself and to remeber how I felt at a certain time.  I have never thought of publishing any of them - it would be like publishing my diary!

 

 



       

[Fishs]

 

Gobe ..

Hope you do not toss that box away ..

Yes publish them in a little book ..

Gobe's  Poetic  Diary of  Real   Life

Be great to collate all your poems   into something like that  so you could look back and see  how your moods  and feeling have changed ..etc.


Fish

[Fishs]

 

Just thought you may like this one ..

Done about five years ago ..

Awakening ..

Hello,  my lady of the night

I sleep well with the thoughts  , the dreams

I am refreshed and anew with  morning light

Butterflys ,  silent   and songbirds sing

The day is born,   the unknown drifts on in the breeze

All is peaceful, soft , fresh with life

I sing along ..


Fish

Just a short little one .. Not even sure what  made me write that one ..

One of those days I suppose.

Fish

[Gobe]

Fish

That's a really good idea.

It would also be much easier to find what I'm lookin for instead of rummaging through the box each time.  Why have I never though of this?  I think I'm just used to having them in an old box.  They do deserve better than that though come to think of it...

[Fishs]

 

 

Gobe .. I am just as bad .. I put mine in an old book .. and i was just reading it now and I can hardly read my own scribble ..

I can also never find the book when I am wanting to find it ..

Fish

[Fishs]

 

  Gobe .. Where is your poem for today ..

I just put a little one up for you  before

A deal is a deal..

Fish

[Gobe]

Fish

I love Awakening!  What an optimistic whimsical wee ditty!

[Gobe]

OK Fish - just going to get my box - back in a mo...can't renege on a deal..

[Fishs]

 

Thanks Gobe ..

As you can see .. I was pensive , thoughtful and melancolic even back then .

Looks like I never change much ..      

Yes  I am the eternal optomist .. I try and work a positive spin into most things ..

Just reading back through my old poem jotting  this morning  and gosh .. I have not changed much ..

Fish

[Gobe]

Fish

I just realised something - my poem is the exact opposite mood to yours!

[Fishs]

 

Yes  Gobe .. Another excellent one ..

Funny .. I love your style .. It is quite emotionally raw  and individual

Thats good .. It portrays freshness and not coached ..

I like that ..

You write with a slight introverted  thought perspective ..

Much like myself ..

Interesting .. Keep it up..

Fish

[Gobe]

Fish

You write with a slight introverted  thought perspective ..

Much like myself ..

Can you explain this to me please Fish?

[Fishs]

 

Gobe .. I was just  thinking that how simmilar these two were but in the opposite  direction .

Thats why I posed the introverted spin .. It just fascinated me ..

Yes .. You have a lot of negativity in that one and a hint of self doubt .. ??

It is so fascinating how peoples personalities come right to the fore depending on the mood at the time ..

Thaese two little poems show that perfectly .. Both introverted and thought provoking  yet a positive and negative under score in the message

Fascinating

Fish

[Fishs]

 

Gobe ..

Introverted thought perspective ..

You  keep your emotional thoughts close  and just feed enough out in your writing to give some insite into how you are portraying your true feelings or emotions .. You give the reader the notion that you are holding something back..

Little bit like teasing the reader  and having them wishing for a more open expression ..

It is excellent writing .. The essence of quality writing is to keep the reader interested and looking for  more ..  You do that well ..

It is an ability not often found in many who write poems..

Fish

[Gobe]

Fish

I have learned more from you tonight about writing poetry than I did at university after completing a 4 year Honours Degree in English.  I went to study literature and poetry and was deeply let down by the course.  I also stopped writing for 4 years and stopped reading for pleasure.  It took me a couple of years to start writing and reading again.  Sometimes studying something you love is a bad idea.

I wish I had met someone like you when I was discovering literature - I can tell you that in all honesty.